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Collecting => Customs => Photonovels and Movies => Topic started by: Jediknight760071 on April 21, 2005, 12:28 AM
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The Republic forces on Ezatam 4 have been crushed. There is
no longer resistance to the Separatist occupiers and their will
goes unquestioned. The Jedi have spent some weeks pushing
forward a motion to return to Ezatam space and free the
population, but their efforts are useless. They've continued to
investigate the Mandalorian, yet no clues as to his identity
have presented themselves. Still, they try to convince the
senate of their case's importance and of the importance of
the Republic citizens trapped on Ezatam 4...
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part11_1.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part11_2.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part11_3.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part11_4.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part11_5.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_1.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_2.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_3.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_4.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_5.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_6.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_7.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_8.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_9.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_10.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_11.jpg)
(http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66/Ezatam/Part12_12.jpg)
Well...I hope this moved the story along and set the stage for the next few photonovels. I added the introduction at the top like some of you suggested and hope that the jumpng from scene to scene didn't confuse anyone. I'm taking these shots as if it were a movie, with one scne placed here, another here, and hopefully at the end, all the small branches will connect smoothly to the trunk.
If you're still confused...please ask questions. I'll be happy to answer any. :)
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Looked pretty good. And one thing to remember, a scene without fighting can be a good thing - just like you did.
The only confusing shot to me was the sudden jump to Bail saying "Wait here..." - I assume he is speaking to a cab driver? A small intro explaining who he is talking to could help.
Other than that, great job - the Senate scene was nice, and it was interesting.
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I liked this one a lot. I enjoyed how you made out Coruscant. I just have to mention the flipped photo of the Astro droid. Looks really odd compared with the other pics of him. :P
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*Sigh* Damn it. You noticed that? >:( Ugh.
Thanks for the compliments...I didn't want any action in this one...It really wouldn't have fit.
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I didn't notice it until it was pointed out. What an eye for detail... you should be happy that was caught - it means that people are paying very close attention to your series. :)
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Looking good! This chapter is great for advancing the plot. I like how you are focusing on Bail I really like his character and I'm glad to see him the spotlight. :) Overall this was a great chapter, good foreshadowing with Mon Mothma and Bail, I think the shot with Bail talking to the cab driver could use an intro or more explaination, maybe a shot of the cab flying with a narative of where it is headed, Bail hailing the cab and telling him heeds to go to the Undercity, or something along those lines. It 'm looking forward to Chap 6! :)
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I agree, this chapter advances the plot nicely. You have a knack for story telling.
Oh - got the Rykrof head today Jediknight760071 - thank you! A couple custom parts coming your way. :)
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nice job on your whole series! Their Awesome!!! ;D
SO when's the next one due? ;D
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;DGreat so far ;D