thanks for the tip guys i'll make sure that my next chapter is way better with pics being more clearer and better looking and that my grammer and everything else is correct and easy to read

CORUSCANT FIGHTERS

Chapter 1: Attack on hoth!

On the planet of hoth Commander Baccara and General Mundi begin their search for general grevious...

Commander Baccara: Captain Rho set your men up into their groups and search for grevious.
Captain Rho: yes commander.
General Mundi: Bacara bring your group with me were going to where the droid base is supposidly at.

Alpha B-15: how come Commander Baccara is always on are tail about this stuff!?
Alpha A-23: Yeah i know.
Captin Rho: What are you men doing get back to your posts! your lucky im alot nicer then Bcacara or he would have killed you by now! Now move it!

Alpha B-15: Man i just want to shoot some stupid droids head off so bad!
Alpha A-23: We all do Alpha.

Alpha A-23: Hey whats that?
Alpha B-15: Whats what?

Alpha A-23: Destroyer!
Alpha B-15: huh?

Alpha A-23: No!!!!!

Alpha A-23: It's an ambush fight to the death!

Commander Bacara: What happend here captain!
Captain Rho: I dont know commander.
General Mundi: An ambush. They were out numbered.

Commander Bacara: Well did you find anything about Grevious being on this planet?
Captain Rho: Nothing but an abanded ship.

Commander Bacara: Well at least give them a proper burial captain.
Captain Rho: Yes sir.

Captain Rho: Your deaths will not be forgotten i promise.

Commander Baccara: Medic how many casualties did we have?
Medic: Only that one group commander.
Commander Bacara: Understood get into the ship medic were going home.

Commander Bacara: Oddball get us off this ice colld planet.
Commander OddBall: Yes sir.

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