Great post, SLC!!!

Chewie, I look forward to seeing your reply.  I realize I never posted an in-depth critique for your last story (I actually got halfway through a couple weeks ago when my computer froze!  ARRRGH!!)  But I will definitely do so, you know how much of a fan I am!

To enhance the playing experience for everyone, I will be posting the other replies from the other threads so everyone can get a chance to read them and possibly get inspired by them.

So here's some stuff from RS:

Findswoman:
Right, now, on with the scene (essentially a copy of what I said on FFURG):

At this juncture, you're pretty much just waiting for Callie, right? That's what I'd recommend, anyway. You can take this time to search that stormtrooper belt, as well as to glance around the room to see what you can see. (That golden robot in the corner, for example, looks prety interesting...) Especially at the stuff she pushed off the desk -- you might learn something about Callie.

And here's why I say that the way I do: The fact that there's stormtrooper gear on the middle of her desk seems a bit odd to me, somehow, and she did seem extremely eager to clear it off when you entered. (After all, I'm sure she's entered that office MANY times before without the need to push all that stuff off the desk -- the difference being that she was alone all those previous times.)

Now I don't mean to rain on people's parade by suggesting that our main character be suspicious of the only friend he's met so far, but given the political sate of affairs on the station, it's a possibility we should keep in mind.

Don't pick up anything just yet, though, or try to follow her. We still want to stay on her good side...


Ling_ster:
Here's what I'd do:

Put my backpack on the chair and move it out of the way.

Remembering the nice view I got of her... Ahem. 

I'd start tiding up the place, especially around the shelves. It's the least I could do for her help. Also, it allows to scope out what she's got back here, especially the junk she tossed on the floor...

Hmmm... sounds kinda iffy... are you going to post any pics later though?

I think you should contact Owen at www.owenscustoms.com... in my experience you can't find anyone better for diorama set ups.

 

I'll try to post pics at some point.  Still working on the new photonovel chapter, which I hope to have up by Monday.

Alas, having bought these, AND the Jedi V. Sith pack AND Anakin Evolutions AND just having become unemployed (again!), I need to put a serious moratorium on toy buying for a while.....

Okay, got my Build A Rama stuff today.

SLIGHTLY disappointed, as the items are a trifle smaller than I was expecting.

The boxes are a bit on the small side and the "generator" really isn't what I was hoping for.  On its side, it's only about waist height for 1/18th scale figures.  It's more like the size of a computer console, but doesn't feel quite bit enough to really serve as a generator or engine, like I was hoping.

It looks pretty good (the paint feels a tad sticky, though).  Not sure it was worth the $25 I shelled out for both items, but now that I've bought 'em, I will at least try to put them to good use.

If I had to do it over, though, I'd skip the generator.  Again, it's just a size issue, really.

This is MAGNIFICENT!

I'll try to post more detailed comments in the future, but I just love, love, LOVE this story.

It's a great story with solid writing and the legos just make it all the more enjoyable, colorful and FUN.

The best thing about Legos, though, is you can build your own environments and sets with ease.  So I hope to see more and more interesting and complex locations in the coming chapters, especially since you can use not only SW, but all the rest of Legos vast lines to support your work (assuming you have piles and piles of money to burn.)

Terrific job!  Come on, folks, we need more replies here!  Where's the love for this wonderful and unique effort???

Wow, I really like these figures, but I must admit, I don't think the first guy looks much like what I envision a Sith to look like.

He looks more like a planetary warloard or crime boss.  Still very cool and Star Wars-y, but I just don't get "Sith" from him....but, that's just me.

And #2 looks more like a gladiator/guard than a Dark Jedi.  Again, extremely cool and VERY great work, but, if it was up to me, I'd "cast" these guys in different roles. 

Wow.  This is really a GREAT project.

It looks terrific.  Keep 'em coming.

I think I mentioned that I was never a fan of SOTE, but I'm SO much more engrossed in this than i was the novel.

There is some really wonderful work here....the train scene was great, all of your sets and customs are fantastic!

This is TERRIFIC!  The legos look fantastic!  It's extremely fun.

A few comments:

I think it's a bit gruesome that Leia has the head of the general in the box....would she really do that?  Seems out of character....

Also, give the thugs NAMES...it makes them seem more real, more defined as characters.

The smaller scale of the lego toys gives you the chance to make more convincing, more imaginative backgrounds.

So don't have any TV's or other recognizable appliances and such in your story.  Making dioramas/backgrounds on this scale is obviously going to be easier than making them for 3 3/4th inch. action figures.  So get to work!

Posterboard and construction paper go a long way.  A few neutral colored backgrounds, even if they aren't sophisticated or complex, are much better than seeing a giant TV in your scene.

But keep it coming!  I really like this!!!