Chewie, I promised you some more Rykrof Enloe commentary, and here it is!
More wonderful work, as always. It's hard to know what to say and to give many intelligent criticisms on these photonovels because I have almost no experience making them myself. But even so, I never cease to be impressed by the work and time you put into this series.
I too was glad to have a recap of the events on Dathomir, if for no other reason than I hadn't read that one in a while!
I always enjoy what you do with light & shadow in these things, and you did some really nice stuff with "night effects" in the Dathomir chapter (no. 16). The campfire scene and the evacuation scene (mentioned by In Rem) are good examples. But in some of those scenes, the lighting seems flatter & duller than in others. For example, the solo photos of Asajj, the Witch, and then Kala Mly Shundi on dathomir all seem a bit too
green, Kala in particular. Also, the photo of Rykrof inside the compound at the computer seems to have the same greenish cast as the outside shots, when instead he's inside
. But that's just me being nitpicky, I guess. :p
Like Quazar, I too like having intrigue and mystery in the SW universe, and you've done a really good job with that. Good storytelling is what turns a photocomic into a photonovel.
It's neat to see the two treasonous alien senators introduced -- I remember oohing & aahing at them in a customs thread some months back, and I'm looking forward to see what you'll have in store for them in the story. Of course, since their "treason" is against someone like Palpatine & co., they could still turn out to be all right... of course, you alone know.
Like In Rem, one of my favorite shots was the post-Coruscant-explosion shot -- very realistic, and very bleak in a way that fits the situation. One of those shots that makes you forget you're looking at something made with action figures!
And of course the soft goods Anakin in Palpy's office jumped out at me -- so that's the Evolutions one, is it? Not bad at all.
All in all, more excellent work again! Now I'll go say some things about no. 18.
And if you ever decide to put all of the installments on a CD-ROM together, please do let me know -- I would be very glad to have one!
... the Findswoman