Best chapter yet, Chewie, and a great set-up for what's to come!
Dathomir had a great build up and then ended a little flat, I thought...but this chapter was even better than those first Dathomir chapters. I have an idea of where this is going and it will be interesting to see how you pull it off. My recommendation on this one is to take your time, and don't feel you have to wrap everything up for us in one or two chapters. I felt that Dathomir ended too quickly, and by the end some of the tension you built was lost. As this chapter was by far your best, both with sets, tightly written characterizations, action and drama, I really want to see it live up to the potential you've built.
I wish I had time to do a scene by scene breakdown, but I don't tonight...suffice it to say my favorite panel was the clones leaving with Kala Mly Shundi as Rykrof stares helplessly at the screen showing his wife. A powerful moment, especially considering you're working with toys! The only thing I would have liked to have seen done differently is the rescue of Alyssa... I would have liked to have seen the order given to execute her, and a close up on the thug aiming at her...and then a lightsaber appears through his chest. Cue rescue scene! I understand Fuuda was trading her, but it would have been just like a villain to have Rykrof where he wants him and then attempt to kill her anyway. You might then have added to Rykrof's pain as he's taken away, believing his wife is dead...that much more misery heaped on our hero.
And speaking of Fuuda...nice touch with it being Trigg's brother, but not revealing it right away. When I first saw him on the screen, I went "What the hell? Fuuda's dead!" I figured it was maybe a holo, but it being a family member out to get revenge was a nice twist.
Well done. Very powerful chapter, can't wait to see more!