I enjoyed the first short chapter, but I am not sure I like how you're narrating it. The trooper describing everything that happened to him in the past tense. It's an odd style, I think you should switch to present tense.
That said, I like the custom, I like the images. Despite the minimalist nature of your sets, I think this has the potential to be a very intriguing story. As Longhorn as shown us, you don't need great FX or dioramas to make a compelling story. The images in the first chapter, I think, are quite good.
Please keep at it, as I am very eager to see more. I would try to tweak the writing just a bit, though. i do like the characterization of the insecure Clone.