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ASSASSINS OF EVIL - Rykrof Enloe # 6 Final Edition
« on: July 10, 2006, 03:37 PM »
Thanks for being patient with me guys on the newer stories as I go back and try to make the originals in this series a little better.  I have got #6 up now.  I hope you like it and I'd love to hear your thoughts.







Although the memory of the Trade Federation's occupation of their planet many years ago will always be on the minds of the population of the peaceful planet Naboo, few in the capital of Theed believe such an aggressive act of war could ever happen again in their lifetime.




However, some have begun to speculate that the galaxy could be edging close to a civil war, as many organizations have seceded from the Republic and joined the Separatist movement, led by former Jedi Count Dooku.




Having recently returned to his home planet, Rykrof Enloe and his young bride, Royal Handmaiden Alyssa, are both all too aware of the dangers that threaten the galaxy. 

With his young love pregnant with their first child, Rykrof has become concerned about the security on his home world.
 



"I've spoken with Senator Amidala about your concerns," Alyssa tells her husband.  "But she doesn't agree with you."




"The government has been too passive on this issue," Rykrof says.  "Governor Bibble and I have urged her about this upcoming vote in the Senate.  But she won't listen.  She and Queen Jamilla must both understand that the Republic needs an army to defend itself."

Rykrof then kisses Alyssa goodbye before conducting his daily routine checks of the planet's defense systems.




After completing a routine inspection of the planet's missile defenses, Rykrof is informed of a holo-virus that has infected the online orbital radar. 

"It's probably nothing major, but it will take another 24 hours to clean and reboot the system," Captain Panaka tells him.  "Our other defense mechanisms were able to block the virus; it's only the radar."




"We shouldn't take any chances," Rykrof says in disagreement.  "I want you to put security on yellow alert.  The Queen or Senator Amidala may be in danger."




After warning his wife of the possible danger, Rykrof finds his Wookiee friend, Boracca tinkering with a pile of broken devices.




He explains to his friend about the virus and states his concerns about the inept security on the planet. 

"This virus may have been planted to allow for a ship to land relatively undetected anywhere on the planet," Rykrof says.  "We should be cautious."




The mighty Wookiee agrees, and offers to contact his good friend Ralbarr, a fellow Wookiee who owes his life to Boracca, and could offer extra protection for Queen Jamilla.

"That's a good idea.  See if you can reach them; the quicker they can arrive, the better," Rykrof says.




Later that evening, in the Shire Lagoon several armed warriors have landed in small ships.  The warriors take advantage of the cover of dark and make their way towards the capital of Theed...




After Boracca's contacts arrive, Rykrof informs them of a Gungan sighting of unauthorized ships landing in the Shire Lagoon.




Both Ralbarr and Choktarr are eager to find the mysterious ships.




"We need for you to stay here and protect the queen," Rykrof says.  "I've put all security on red alert and have authorized a public quarantine in the city.  I'll take a team to the landing site and see what we find."
 



Ralbarr then tells his longtime friend to be careful on their hunt.




"We better get moving," Captain Revner says.  "If whoever landed in the lagoon is hostile, they won't be staying there long."




Led by a Gungan guide, the small group then leaves the safety of the city walls in search of the mysterious invaders.
 



"Nothing yet," Captain Revner says.  "Maybe the ships aren't hostiles after all."




Suddenly Rykrof's comlink comes to life and a message from Captain Panaka back at the capital comes through.

"I think it's over Rykrof.  A group of Whipids was discovered trying to infiltrate the palace.  We were forced to gun them down," Captain Panaka says.




"That's a relief," Rykrof says as he looks up to Boracca.  "But we still have to find their ships."




Suddenly a laser blast rips through the air and smashes through Boracca's chest!

"No!" Rykrof yells in horror as his team takes defensive positions.




As Rykrof looks in the direction of the attack, he sees two droids, unlike any he has seen before approaching the group.  He then realizes that the Whipid attackers Captain Panaka referred to were either a decoy or the first assault.




The Super Battle Droids then make short work on the Gungan guide.




"How is the Wookiee?" Captain asks as he returns heavy fire at the attackers.
 



"I ...I don't think he's breathing," Rykrof says.




"We have to call for help," he barely manages to say as he realizes his friend is dead.




"It's too late for help," a Rodian says who has snuck up behind Rykrof.  "Trigg Fuuda will be most pleased to see you on Tatooine."




Captain Revner then sees the horrifying image of two Mandalorian warriors approach them.




With the two droids standing guard as well, Rykrof and Revner know there is no chance for escape.




"I am disappointed in you," the Rodian says.  "Master Fuuda has spoken so highly of your battle tactics.  I truly hoped for more resistance, but you are no match for Zeedo Chissis," the Rodian laughs.




As Rykrof is watched closely by the Mandalorian warriors, Zeedo speaks to Captain Revner.

"What is your name?" the evil Rodian asks.

"Jagred Revner, in service to the Queen of Naboo," he replies firmly.




"My master did not mention you as a potential hostage," Zeedo says as he kills the captain in cold blood.




"Now, what to do with you," Zeedo asks.  "Tell my master you were killed in the battle, or bring you back crippled?"




Suddenly both Super Battle Droids are engulfed in flames!




The group then hears a thundering roar as the powerful Wookiee Ralbarr charges madly towards the intruders!




Realizing he is no match for this Wookiee, Zeedo Chissis retreats in a sprint for his ship.




In a matter of moments, blood flows from one warrior's throat...
 



...while the other hangs dismembered from a tree; his lifeless body a gruesome testament to the unparalleled rage of a Wookiee.




Ralbarr then effortlessly picks up the body of his friend and howls a sad cry towards Rykrof.

"I'm so sorry," Rykrof laments.  "I'll call for help."




Soon after, Zeedo Chissis narrowly avoids a new search party and makes his way back to his ATL Interceptor. 

Although his mission to capture or kill Rykrof Enloe was a failure, he knows his master; Trigg Fuuda will be pleased to learn that the mighty Boracca has fallen in battle.




The next morning, the skies above the capital are abuzz with patrols in the aftermath of the attack.




After debriefing with Captain Panaka, Rykrof bids farewell to his wife, Alyssa.




"Captain Panaka's team found the remaining ships in the lagoon," he tells his wife.  "Trigg Fuuda is still running the Badoo Corba and I know for a fact he's on Tatooine ... after we return Boracca's body to Kashyyyk, I have to return to Coruscant and organize a team to find the Badoo Corba's hidden base."




"Just be careful Rykrof," his wife says solemnly. 

"The terrorists must really want you dead."




"What about the Separatist Movement?" Naboo Councilman Tason Push interjects. 

"Please contact us after you speak with Chancellor Palpatine."




"I will do what I can," Rykrof says. 

"But Senator Amidala has more influence than I do, especially with the Military Creation Act in consideration."




"You know where I stand on this issue," Senator Amidala says.  "Raising an army will only encourage a war."

"We're well aware of your concerns, Senator," Alyssa says with a smile.  "And we trust you will do what you feel is in the best interest of our people."




"Just be careful here and if anything happens, contact me," Rykrof tells his wife.

"I'm more worried about you," she says. 

"Don't worry; Ralbarr insists on following Boracca's debt.  He's been stubborn about it, plus he's a lot bigger than me; so what can I say?" he says with a smile.




"I love you," Alyssa tells him.

"And I love you," he replies. 

"After this is all over we'll be able to have our child.  We must stay positive and look towards the future; together we'll get through this."





TO BE CONTINUED....



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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #1 on: July 10, 2006, 04:06 PM »
BOOOOORRRACCCA NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'(

I never really liked this chapter :'(

But this remake is excellant. I reallly like it alot, the blood looked real and the effects were spectacular.

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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #2 on: July 10, 2006, 04:11 PM »

I never really liked this chapter :'(


Because of what happens to Boracca or something else?

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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #3 on: July 10, 2006, 04:19 PM »
Chewie - great "Final" edition.  I put final in quotes because you can never say never ;)  A couple of comments.  

You've really done well putting the digital enhancements (blaster fire, etc) into these.  As you know I've already said that Naboo set is over the top.  

A few misc. comments:

Is the Amidala figure a custom?  It almost looks like the head was digitally added to an existing figure.  Am I totally lame for not recogizing that Amidala body?  

Is Captain Revner a custom figure?  Again, I don't recognize the face.  I don't have all the Naboo figures memorized but it looks like a Panaka with a different head.

I think the first Naboo Discussions between Alyssa and Rykrof should probably taken place in the interior of their home.  I just think that it would make for better variety in the PN, plus its a bit more personal discussion.

Anyway, this is another outstanding entry!


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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #4 on: July 10, 2006, 04:36 PM »
One of the most noble wookies died, why do you think i don't like it :'(

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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #5 on: July 10, 2006, 08:04 PM »
Smarty - Gotcha.  You better not read chapters 22-30 then when they are completed, lots of death... lots of characters will be bidding farewell to the series.   ;)

Brent - Thanks for the review.  The Naboo set really helped and I agree, an indoor scene probably would have been better.   Guess I was just in a hurry.

The Amidala is a quick custom, I just popped the head from the SAGA Lars Homestead Padme and put it on the POTC Celebration Padme.  Revner is a custom figure, the face is from an OTC Lobot and the body is from Panaka like you thought.

Thanks!

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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #6 on: July 10, 2006, 08:09 PM »
Oh I'll still read em and enjoy them, just get sad :(

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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #7 on: July 10, 2006, 09:57 PM »
The Amidala is a quick custom, I just popped the head from the SAGA Lars Homestead Padme and put it on the POTC Celebration Padme. 

Ah Ha!  Celebration Padme.  I just couldn't place that body.  I totally forgot about that one.

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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #8 on: July 11, 2006, 06:23 AM »
cool as always chewie

but why is cousin it (from the adams family) talking to a naboo pilot ? ;D
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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #9 on: July 11, 2006, 03:06 PM »
blaster_e11 - LOL, that does look like Cousin It from that angle.  Hilarious!

Brent - I remember seeing so many of each of those Padmes, I wish I had the sense to buy a few more back then.

Smarty - Any characters you want to see bite the dust?  I've got it in my mind to kill off all but 3-4 characters by the end of the Clone Wars, and introduce some new ones.

As it stands probably the only character at this point that is safe is Rykrof.  The others are all fair game to be killed -

- Alyssa Enloe the wife
- Tylin Gere the Admiral
- Ralbarr the Wookiee
- Freelo the Mon Calamari
- Kala Mly Shundi the Jedi
- Finis Valorum the former Chancellor
- Tame Heem the Ambassador
- Traedon Cusiro the Smuggler
- Mubaas Fuuda the Terrorist
- Troffar the Terrible
- Zeedo Chissis the Terrorist
- General Snodd the Separatist

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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #10 on: July 11, 2006, 03:58 PM »
You can't kill Valorum in your own story, unless you go by EU. I know isn't that a bugger. ;D Valorum :P

I'd like to see Snod kneel before Rykrof as he kills him ;D

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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #11 on: July 11, 2006, 04:01 PM »
Yeah, Valorum is the one character that isn't fan-fic in my main characters.  I've got the comic book reference for his death, and will stay true to it.

For Snodd, there will probably be a surprise or two with his character.

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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #12 on: July 17, 2006, 05:49 AM »
I love the update!

Great sets, great action.  Zeedo was always my favorite badoo corba.  Keep him alive for the long haul!

Get rid of Mubbas (just a retread of Trigg) and do more with Snodd, who is a cool, but underused character.

I also always liked ralbarra more than Borocca (probably because he just seems more fleshed out, as he's been in more chapters).  Borocca's death was shocking the first time you did this story, but obviously knowing the outcome robs the impact.

But bring on Ralbarr!

Good stuff all around, Chewie, but I think it's time for a new, NEW chapter!  ;)
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Re: Rykrof Enloe #6 - ASSASSINS OF EVIL
« Reply #13 on: July 17, 2006, 05:23 PM »
great improvments onthis chapter chewie!

- as always the digi visual where great! i reallyliked the double blast coming from the sbd, looked awsome.

- the gore that happened when the mandos where torn aprt was very well done. i really liked the body hanging in the tree, it gave the imperession of a wooikie gone berzerk.

- i have to say that my fav in this chapter was the part where zeedo had rykoff in his sights and started monologing random badguy crap, giving away info like halloween candy and failing in his mission! it reminds me of old comic books, very cool!

great work chewie and i can't wait to see the new chapters and more rehashes of the old ones!
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« Reply #14 on: November 29, 2006, 10:46 PM »
 ;D ;DEnough said You're fantastic! these ar so much better.George Lucas would be proud ;D
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