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Vaders Fist!
« on: July 7, 2006, 12:31 AM »
This will be my second novel. My first novel coruscant fighters wasn't the greatest. But now that i know what to do thanks to chewie and everyone else who helped me out i am going to make a better novel :).  This novel is going to be about the 501st before and after the execution of order 66. Be on the look out next week to see the first chapter. ;D
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #1 on: July 7, 2006, 09:49 AM »
sounds great...i love anything to do the 501st cant wait for chapter 1!
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #2 on: July 7, 2006, 02:28 PM »
thanks master brisk heres a preveiw pic that will start off the chapter i am still writing the script and shooting but keep an eye out for chapter 1.
sry the pic isnt the greatest but dont worry the lighting will be better  ;D
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #3 on: July 7, 2006, 02:37 PM »
It's just a bit blurry unfortunately... looks interesting though!

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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #4 on: July 7, 2006, 03:18 PM »
Garindan and Boba... That's an odd pair.

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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #5 on: July 7, 2006, 04:28 PM »
I think the focus will the biggest thing that challenges you.  I'm not sure what kind of camera you are using but you should try to get it set up to "Macro" mode.  It often looks like the flower icon in the settings.  That will allow you to get very close to figures and stay in focus. 

Good luck and keep up the good work!
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #6 on: July 7, 2006, 06:09 PM »
i agree...a very odd pair...im intriuged as to how these two fit in with the 501st...cant wait for chapter 1...im really looking forward to it!
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #7 on: July 9, 2006, 04:22 PM »
Garindan and Boba... That's an odd pair.
Make sure NBC,ABC or Fox dosen't see that post or they'll make a TV show out of that. :P
What happened to Coruscant Fighters you neverfinished that.
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #8 on: July 9, 2006, 05:48 PM »
Garindan and Boba... That's an odd pair.
Make sure NBC,ABC or Fox dosen't see that post or they'll make a TV show out of that. :P

"Tonight on Boba & Garindan! Boba meets Garindan's girlfriend... And hilarity ensues! Tonight on FOX!"
« Last Edit: July 9, 2006, 05:48 PM by HunterofThePegs »

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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #9 on: July 9, 2006, 05:57 PM »
And tomorow on Vader and Han,
Han catches Vader making out with Leia,
tune in tomorow for all the drama, right here on FOX!
All jokes aside,
Looks interesting, kinda blurry though.
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #10 on: July 9, 2006, 06:11 PM »
thanks for the advice the pics shouldnt be as blurry be on the look out for chp.1 friday ;D
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #11 on: July 9, 2006, 09:07 PM »
Vaders Fist Chp.1

As Commander Appo meets with his captain he tells his men to watch the docking bay.

Sergent: Freeze you have the right to remain silent!

Killer: May i ask why?

Sergent: No! Now drop your weapon!



Killer: How about i kill you? Sounds fair enough am i right?

Sergent: No it is not all right!

Killer: To bad i think it is.



Commander Appo: Freeze! If you even raise a finger we'll shoot!

Anakin: Dont worry commander he does'nt have any arms. Well at least now he does'nt. I'll continue with the interogation commander.

Commander Appo: Yes Sir!



Commander Appo: Captain make sure no one leaves or enters the docking bay without my permission.

Captain: Yes sir!



Anakin: Now where were we killer? Oh yes i was about to kill you! Give me one good reason why i should'nt kill you!

Killer: I will tell you who hired me! Please dont kill me!

Anakin: I'm listening.

Killer: Garindan! He hired me!

Anakin: Do you know where he is?



Killer: No unfortunatley no.

Ankain: Then i don't need you any more!

Killer: Please don't! Ahhhhhhhh!!!!!!......



Boba Fett: Did your killer actually get the job done?

Garindan: No he was killed.

Boba Fett: Then you have failed me.



Garindan: Give me another chance please !

Boba Fett: Of course.

Garindan: Realy!

Boba Fett: No! Now you die!



To Be Continued...




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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #12 on: July 10, 2006, 07:06 AM »
that was interesting,

nice use of the Jedi temple package as a background pic, i'm not sure about the use of the senate one though  :-\

i'm still not sure about the choice of characters, it's kinda weird to  mix OT and PT characters but that's why fan-fiction is for ;)

maybe you should work a bit more on dialogues too
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #13 on: July 12, 2006, 11:23 PM »
What's up with Anakin being human instead of Vader suit?
I like it,poor Garindan!
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Re: Vaders Fist!
« Reply #14 on: July 12, 2006, 11:57 PM »
anakin is not in his vader suit yet bc this is before the jedi were killed and wiped out but dont worry soon hes gonna become darth vader
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