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212th Mission Code Name A356(Sorry see below!)
« on: August 14, 2006, 01:31 PM »
Intro:
After the transition to phase two armor the 3rd army of the Republic detected more sepratist strongholds on Jabiim.The 18th company went to Jabiim to do some surveilence.We haven't heard from them since.Later the 212th Attack Battalion was sent in.
Prvt. Kay:Commander Zordan, how far off is camp Gamma.
C.Zordon:Are you tired private?
Prvt. Kay:Yes Sir!
C.Zordon:Okay!Break time everyone!

LT.Needa:Sir!I have something on radar!
C.Zordon:What is it?
LT.Needa:I don't know.It has no heat signature.It's either a large tree or a droid.
Medic Jones:Some action maybe?

C.Zordon:Maybe.

Prvt.11089:AAhhh!
Medic Jones:He's been head shot!
C.Zordon:I see that!

Medic Jones:He's gone.
Prvt.Kay:AAHhhh!

C.Zordon:Does anyone see the shooter?
Medic Jones:We need to get back to Alpha!
LT.Needa:I got him!

It's no longer a threat.
C.Zordon:Let's get to alpha.Needa radio Cody.
LT.Needa:Yes sir!

Later that day at Alpha BaseC.Zordon:Cody said to meet him here
Cody:Commander,Good to see you!
Zordon:Same to you.

Cody:This is Commander Gree of the 41st.

Gree:Hi!
Zordon:Hello!
Cody:He's agreed to help us find the Sepratists.Good Day!


To be Continued...[/glow]
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Re: 212th on Jabiim Code Name A356
« Reply #1 on: August 16, 2006, 12:27 PM »
The next day at Alpha Base.Gree was discussing what his troops, assigned to him by Cody, found.
Gree:This is a hologram of Jabiim.Rotate by 20%.Do you see that brown speck that is the driest spot on the whole planet and it is even wet.This is where we are going.The Sepratists have built huge mining facilities there.We believe General Greivous is there.

C.Zordon:So How far is it?

C.Gree: 18 klicks East.

C.Z.:To the Desert or the Seps.

C.G.:Desert.

C.Z.:To the Seps.

C.G.:All depends if we go through the desert 25 klicks.If we go around 34 klicks.Plus, the Gunship  can only take us to the desert.What way do you want to go?

C.Z.:It's Jones' choice.

Medic Jones:Mine?Let's see if we go through we could die of heat exhaustion.If we go around the seps may learn of our presence and move out or attack.Can we use the Gunship if we go around.

C.G.:Yes.

M.Jones:We're going around.


Later

Pilot:We're approaching target.1 klick exactly.

C.G.:Open Doors and land here.Troops gear up.

Troops:Yes Sir!
Landed
C.Z.:Let's go.

Pilot:We're Picking up a squad of droids headed for us!

C.G.:Take them out!

Pilot:AHHHHH!
Crash!
C.G.:Come on troops!Fire!

Blasts
C.Z.:Ahh!

M. Jones:Cover me!
Blast!
C.G:That's all of them!LT. call for reinforcements!

Jedi Knight:No need.

C.G.:Teo!Can you heal Zordon?

Teo:I can try.

To be continued...

Will modify when pics are ready.
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Re: 212th on Jabiim Code Name A356(Update below!)
« Reply #2 on: August 16, 2006, 07:50 PM »
good stroy board keep up the good work :) Can't wait to see the pther pics ;D Not to bug you or anything but i was wondering what kind of camera do you have bc mine stinks ! and yours takes perfect pics :D I would love to know what kind of camera it is and where i can get it plz and thank you ;D

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Re: 212th on Jabiim Code Name A356(Update below!)
« Reply #3 on: August 17, 2006, 09:02 AM »
good stroy board keep up the good work :) Can't wait to see the pther pics ;D Not to bug you or anything but i was wondering what kind of camera do you have bc mine stinks ! and yours takes perfect pics :D I would love to know what kind of camera it is and where i can get it plz and thank you ;D

-Garrett-

It's a Sony CD Mavica available at most Targets.But it's slow to download but like you said it takes good pictures


The reason I changed the name of the photonovel is that later in the story line the 212th will travel to Naboo,Raxus Prime, and Rhen Varr.

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Re: 212th Mission Code Name A356(Preview below!)
« Reply #4 on: August 18, 2006, 10:41 PM »
cant wait to see what happens and thanks for the info ;D
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Re: 212th Mission Code Name A356(Preview below!)
« Reply #5 on: August 19, 2006, 11:12 AM »
Hey! Nice story and cool customs.
I like the paint scheme on Zordon.  I also like the outdoor shots. :D

If I can just offer a bit of advice,
some of the shots really show off your house, like the tabletop shots where I can see the kitchen chair, your wall full of pictures, newspapers, and "Cowboy Petes? " Box ...what is that by the way?  As great as your story is, these elements can be distracting; a very simple fix would be just some new camera angles.  Try to angle the lense down,  just a touch more, so you will not pick up the house background.  This will really tighten up your PNs, and it's simple to do.

Still, a great job and looking forward to more!
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Re: 212th Mission Code Name A356(Preview below!)
« Reply #6 on: August 19, 2006, 11:24 AM »
Cowboy Petes.... :P
Nice story going on here!
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Re: 212th Mission Code Name A356(Preview below!)
« Reply #7 on: August 19, 2006, 02:35 PM »
I would have painted those boxes but Then they would probably useless in the future.  ;D

I might want to tell you that I think(so far I haven't written it but it sounds cool in my mind) the Naboo part in the pn will be the best.No more Pete during that. Totally out of doors. with AT-RT's and BARC speeders.Might I add a suprise custom vehicle!
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« Reply #8 on: August 19, 2006, 11:27 PM »
sweet ;D ;D ;D
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Re: 212th Mission Code Name A356(Preview below!)
« Reply #9 on: October 3, 2006, 08:42 PM »
Update in anywhere from 3 to 10 days.
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Re: 212th Mission Code Name A356(Sorry see below!)
« Reply #10 on: November 24, 2006, 07:11 PM »
I will post the words of the next two chapter tommorow.
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