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Re: United: The Sacrafice the Bearer Beared
« Reply #30 on: May 26, 2005, 04:22 PM »
Thanks guys, glad its been universally praised so far. So how much of an improvement is this over Nal Salio?
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Re: United: The Sacrafice the Bearer Beared
« Reply #31 on: May 26, 2005, 10:36 PM »
A fantastic start...I can already see you're dialogue blowing myself, Chewie, and Lance, out of the water. Clever with the VHS tapes too. :)

Anyone could see the improvement over Nal Solio.

I would give this beginning chapter an A+, but since you interrupted my best scoring game of DOD in months, I've got to bump it down a bit and teach you a lesson. ;)

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Re: United: The Sacrafice the Bearer Beared
« Reply #32 on: May 26, 2005, 10:44 PM »
Ha, thanks a lot! I'm really excited about this entire project though...part II should be up sometime soon, since it's pretty short.
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Re: United: The Sacrafice the Bearer Beared
« Reply #33 on: May 27, 2005, 01:37 AM »
Great job, I really love the dialogue.

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Re: United: The Sacrafice the Bearer Beared
« Reply #34 on: May 27, 2005, 10:11 AM »
Thanks, I really wanted the photonovel to be more like a novel than like a movie.
Announcing today, the kickoff of The United: The Politic of Conquest and Rebellion. More information in its offical thread.
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Re: The United: The Sacrifice the Bearer Beared
« Reply #35 on: June 6, 2005, 07:45 PM »
Put the novel on the opening page and on the 2nd page!
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Re: The United: The Sacrifice the Bearer Beared
« Reply #36 on: November 24, 2006, 12:00 AM »
 ;Dnice Job ;D
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