Well thank you guys...all the comments are appreciated.
I'm trying to work on the dialogue. I've started to put more time and thought into it, not just making it up as I go along. I've also considered building some larger sets. I don't have much room in my house, but with summer coming, I'll hopefully have a job and a little extra money to buy materials and use the space I've got effectively.
I apologize for the different sizes between each picture. That's something I really didn't think about until a few weeks ago, but the pictures I'm using are fairly old already, and I don't take pictures with that in mind. Hopefully by the next few photonovels, I'll have a standard photo size. I also apologize for the first shot. I suppose that I knew who Ardan Torik was, so I assumed you'd catch on fairly wuickly, but it didn't turn out to go so smoothly, as I had though it would.
I realize the need for narration in this next series. I was thinking that I'd still do the scriptish style (Ardan:, Dooku:, 88:, etc.) but this time I would put quotes around vocals, and no quotes would symbolize thoughts. Italics would be narration to a future event, like the scene of 88 and Ardan sneaking into the Refueling station. White letters at the top would be used for scene changes, and other narration would be in the shot if needed (ex. The explosion in the crowd).
88 being Ardan's personal Battle Droid was an idea that always appealed to me. I had always gotten the impression that the Trade Federation bought Battle Droids from another corporation and had used them in mass amounts for their own purposes, but could a battle droid be reprogrammed for personal use? We'll see. I'm hoping that the relationship between Ardan and 88 will be more personal than commander to unit, but a gradual transition from "Yes sir" to "Yea", not just a flick of the switch. I want the battle droid to be more like a protocol droid, at least personality wise.
I've got a lot more to say, but I lost m train of thought, so I guess I'll continue later.
Thanks again guys.