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Collecting => Customs => Photonovels and Movies => Topic started by: Vator on April 17, 2005, 01:27 PM
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Here's a sample from the prequel to my next photonovel, The United.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/Empireday.jpg)
The setting for this Photonovel is one year after the events of Revenge of the Sith, on the second "Empire Day". The picture is of the Imperial propaganda promoting the ever growing military. The text reads: "Defending you"
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United: The Sacrafice the Bearer Beared
“After the glorious Emperor saved the Galaxy from the cold deathly claws of the Separatist Movement, he then realized the dangers that still faced the Galaxy. Through deploying the mighty Grand Army of the Empire to various theatres of war across the Galaxy, the Emperor was able to maintain order from the savage demagogues in the outer rim. United and Mighty, the Emperor finally freed the Galaxy of its dangerous self and took unto him it’s body…single, united. Forever.” - The Imperial Tome for the Advancement of the United, 4:23.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United005.jpg)
The mid morning is a bright one on the sterile, white streets of Imperial Center Monument. The Monument itself is an offering to the brave warriors of the Clone Wars. Its linear streets and alleys devoid of permanent life, in a way it’s just like the brave Clone Soldiers that the monument is built for…unwavering…cold…soulless.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United006.jpg)
But not today, today was a day for celebration. Coruscanti and off-worlder alike joined in the merriment of this, the second “Empire Day”. Crowds nearly 2 million strong line the streets near the executive boxes where the Military High Command and Imperial Supporters stand around the heroic zenith of the age, Emperor Palpatine.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United008.jpg)
The Emperor stands tall, and yet hides his distorted and disgusting features from the public under the hood of his black robe. The Emperor is somewhat like the Galaxy at the time…simple. He wears only a black robe, carries only a modest cane, and is surrounded by a few necessary bodyguards
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United010.jpg)
. But neither are truly simple, the Galaxy is at war with itself...mainly thanks to the cancer of Palpatine. The Emperor, however, shares a different kind of turmoil. His only thoughts are of self-advancement and the destruction of all he sees inferior. Yet where would he be without the inferior rabble? He knows deep down that until he can achieve his ultimate goal…to become the Force persona, he will need to keep the infidels around. This is where his true hatred comes from, from his drive to destroy the infidels and his frustration at continually having to climb to reach the top. He wants his goal now. He wants to destroy them now. But he cannot. Not even if he wants to.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United011.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United012.jpg)
The Senatorial procession makes its way down the street, turning sharply into the Executive boxes. A young human male, of dark pigment carries the banner of the former Galactic Republic ahead of two Imperial Security officers in smart blue uniforms. Behind them, a small cockade of blue robed Senate guards. One of them even sporting the antiquated feather adorned fin.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United015.jpg)
The crowds go silent as the standard bearer approaches the executive arena. He passes a column of Clone Troopers, their blasters at the ready. The column of soldiers is flanked by Imperial Veterans of war…sporting the old fashion armor from just a few years earlier. The Empire is the Military Industrial Complex gone mad, with new materials being supplied to high priority personnel every so two or three years.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United016.jpg)
Behind these troops, several Clone Troopers stand arranged in an eerie living statue like pose…each precise to a fault. And in front of the column stands the commander of these forces, his arms crossed proudly at his back, his smug expression atypical of a “fit and willing Imperial son”.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United019.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United020.jpg)
Under the Emperors box stands several Imperial Senators, notebly Mon Mothma and Bail Organa. Beside them stand many of the Emperors closest advisors, wearing dark colored robes of a simple make
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United022.jpg)
It was once said by the now deceased poet Jahkaus Amoul that the “Greatness and pomp that was once the regal Galactic Republic is now gone, replaced only by cold unfeeling utility. In essence, the Galaxy has been made sterile, and callous,”.
Even though a rose colored image of the late Republic, it is true. The Empire was dead, more superficial. Society had lost something since the beginnings of the rise of the Emperor…an ornate elegance it would never truly restore. This is represented in the attire of the Emperors advisors and friend’s, there is no longer a need or a want for unnecessary pleasures. Only for what is now.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United026.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United027.jpg)
As the Senatorial procession advances forward, a human male wearing povish clothes jumps forward with a blaster and fires into the heart of the young standard bearer. Shouting “Long Remember the Death of the Republic!”, the man is mowed down by blaster fire from the soldiers in the colum. The officer of the troops is also killed in that fated instant.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United029.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United031.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United037.jpg)
The crowds panic and begin to flee before the voice of the Emperor is heard over the screams of small children. “STOP! This is a time for celebration! We shall celebrate the sacrifice of this brave young son of the sons! And we shall celebrate the self elimination of this insidious threat!”
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United038.jpg)
And so the people did return to their stations, faithful that their beloved leader was right. After all, he did survive the Jedi Rebellion.
And like the Jedi Rebellion, this was but a ploy…a ploy in a much, much larger scheme.
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Nicely done! Are you going to photoshop out the German tanks and add in AT-TE's and Turbo tanks?
-DD
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Holy hell! That's evil looking (yet very cool).
I am very much looking forward to seeing this!
"Empire Day" - too cool!
:P
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Nicely done! Are you going to photoshop out the German tanks and add in AT-TE's and Turbo tanks?
-DD
Not neccesarily...see the tanks are actually supposed to represent how the Empire towers over its planetary allies in "Defending You". The T-34 in the picture is in this universe a random peice of armor, rather than an actual Soviet tank in the Empire.
The story will show how the Empire used various planetary forces to help in the subjugation of the Galaxy...and ironically theirselfs. However the story is much more darker and twisted than that.
That picture is one of the many peices of propaganda lining the streets of Coruscant.
Chewie:
Have you read the ROTS novel? If so you'll certainly get the Empire Day thing.
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I am reading the novel a little bit each night before going to bed, right now I am on page 115 or so. So far it rocks.
Again, your posted looks cool. I know you like the tank in the photo... but I almost think an AT-TE would look even cooler.
I am going to create a couple of propaganda posters too in my series. Just haven't gotten around to it.
:P
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Well, perhaps after Celebration III I can rework it?
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“After the glorious Emperor saved the Galaxy from the cold deathly claws of the Separatist Movement, he then realized the dangers that still faced the Galaxy. Through deploying the mighty Grand Army of the Empire to various theatres of war across the Galaxy, the Emperor was able to maintain order from the savage demagogues in the outer rim. United and Mighty, the Emperor finally freed the Galaxy of its dangerous self and took unto him it’s body…single, united. Forever.” – The Imperial Tome for the Advancement of the United, 4:23.
More soon.
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Sounds cool. It definatley sounds like propaganda the Empire would have put out.
Any idea when we get to see the first part or some preview shots?
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Hopefully by Friday...if not certainly over the weekend.
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The first preview pictures are now here, rejoyce!
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United001.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United002.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United003.jpg)
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Nice, very nice!
I really like the painted 21st Century figure. He looks Imperial-esque with the blue paint job. He has a lightsaber and stub arm... can't wait to see what that's all about!
I see you changed the title, correct?
:P
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Yes indeed I have. This title will become more understandable as the story is released. Right now, I have to remake the opening scenes since my entire setup fell over. :-\
Re: Officer: I'm glad you like him, there are lots of other 21st/BBi custom people in here all Star Wars'd up. Can't say the affiliation though.
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I like, I like! Especially that officer fig, he looks cool! What's the deal with the McQuarrie Stormtrooper though, as in what's his purpose? He just looks out of place...
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I've always treated the Concept Stormies as crowd control Clones/Stormies. You've read the script...which has been altered slightly in that the Royal Guard Operatives are currently nixed, but that may change.
Another Preview, this time a part of the narrative's Rough Draft.
The mid morning is a bright one on the sterile, white streets of Imperial Center Monument. The Monument is an offering to the brave warriors of the Clone Wars. Its linear streets and alleys devoid of permanent life, in a way it’s just like the brave Clone Soldiers that the monument is built for…unwavering…cold...souless.
But not today, today was a day for celebration. Coruscanti and off-worlder alike joined in the merriment of this, the second “Empire Day”. Crowds nearly 2 million strong line the streets near the executive boxes where the Military High Command and Imperial Supporters stand around the heroic zenith of the age, Emperor Palpatine.
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Oooooo! :)
Lookin' good!! I like the inclusion of the McQuarrie trooper, it does look like it could be crowd control. I think it would have been a better choice to use that awesome crowd control stormtrooper though. ;) ::) :)
I'm looking forward to seeimg the first chapter! :)
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See Below for Final!
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Sweet! I can't wait.
I love that tidbit about Palpy, it describes him very well and he sounds so evil. Nice shot of the clones, too. Though I don't know how many of the AOTC clones would be left by then, you could try and replace them digitally, though that would be quite dificult unless you know how.
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I don't want to though...besides I have always felt that armor wasn't just thrown away, probably reused by grunts or local militias loyal to the Empire.
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I've been paying attention to this thread since it was started, but i'll tell you. I'm really starting to get excited about it. Lookign real good Vator
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This is looking like it will turn out great. I know you have the resources, figure wise to put out a very sweet photo novel. Keep up the great work!
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Looks like it will be a cool, evil type of story. Can't wait!
:P
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Nice pics! Everything appers to be coming along nicely.
I don't want to though...besides I have always felt that armor wasn't just thrown away, probably reused by grunts or local militias loyal to the Empire.
That's what I thought. In fact, it's revealed in my upcoming photonovel (still a WIP) that the Empire sold old uniforms to local armies at discounted prices.
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Where have I heard that idea before? :P
Glad to hear all the positive remarks though.
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Well if I said anything other than "local armies", it would give too much away. ;)
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I suppose so, yes. Tommorow morning I intend to make my reshoots and then do some effects...but only after I finished my revisions to the script. So hang on, and lets hope for next week.
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These things sure are time consuming to make, aren't they? But worthy every precious hour and curse in the end. :)
I am really looking forward to seeing what you come up with. And I wouldn't worry too much about explaining the Clone armor - knowledgeable people of Star Wars should understand.
:P
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I agree, I think it's only mentioned in that paragraph included in the preview.
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United: The Sacrafice the Bearer Beared
“After the glorious Emperor saved the Galaxy from the cold deathly claws of the Separatist Movement, he then realized the dangers that still faced the Galaxy. Through deploying the mighty Grand Army of the Empire to various theatres of war across the Galaxy, the Emperor was able to maintain order from the savage demagogues in the outer rim. United and Mighty, the Emperor finally freed the Galaxy of its dangerous self and took unto him it’s body…single, united. Forever.” - The Imperial Tome for the Advancement of the United, 4:23.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United005.jpg)
The mid morning is a bright one on the sterile, white streets of Imperial Center Monument. The Monument itself is an offering to the brave warriors of the Clone Wars. Its linear streets and alleys devoid of permanent life, in a way it’s just like the brave Clone Soldiers that the monument is built for…unwavering…cold…soulless.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United006.jpg)
But not today, today was a day for celebration. Coruscanti and off-worlder alike joined in the merriment of this, the second “Empire Day”. Crowds nearly 2 million strong line the streets near the executive boxes where the Military High Command and Imperial Supporters stand around the heroic zenith of the age, Emperor Palpatine.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United008.jpg)
The Emperor stands tall, and yet hides his distorted and disgusting features from the public under the hood of his black robe. The Emperor is somewhat like the Galaxy at the time…simple. He wears only a black robe, carries only a modest cane, and is surrounded by a few necessary bodyguards
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United010.jpg)
. But neither are truly simple, the Galaxy is at war with itself...mainly thanks to the cancer of Palpatine. The Emperor, however, shares a different kind of turmoil. His only thoughts are of self-advancement and the destruction of all he sees inferior. Yet where would he be without the inferior rabble? He knows deep down that until he can achieve his ultimate goal…to become the Force persona, he will need to keep the infidels around. This is where his true hatred comes from, from his drive to destroy the infidels and his frustration at continually having to climb to reach the top. He wants his goal now. He wants to destroy them now. But he cannot. Not even if he wants to.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United011.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United012.jpg)
The Senatorial procession makes its way down the street, turning sharply into the Executive boxes. A young human male, of dark pigment carries the banner of the former Galactic Republic ahead of two Imperial Security officers in smart blue uniforms. Behind them, a small cockade of blue robed Senate guards. One of them even sporting the antiquated feather adorned fin.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United015.jpg)
The crowds go silent as the standard bearer approaches the executive arena. He passes a column of Clone Troopers, their blasters at the ready. The column of soldiers is flanked by Imperial Veterans of war…sporting the old fashion armor from just a few years earlier. The Empire is the Military Industrial Complex gone mad, with new materials being supplied to high priority personnel every so two or three years.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United016.jpg)
Behind these troops, several Clone Troopers stand arranged in an eerie living statue like pose…each precise to a fault. And in front of the column stands the commander of these forces, his arms crossed proudly at his back, his smug expression atypical of a “fit and willing Imperial son”.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United019.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United020.jpg)
Under the Emperors box stands several Imperial Senators, notebly Mon Mothma and Bail Organa. Beside them stand many of the Emperors closest advisors, wearing dark colored robes of a simple make
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United022.jpg)
It was once said by the now deceased poet Jahkaus Amoul that the “Greatness and pomp that was once the regal Galactic Republic is now gone, replaced only by cold unfeeling utility. In essence, the Galaxy has been made sterile, and callous,”.
Even though a rose colored image of the late Republic, it is true. The Empire was dead, more superficial. Society had lost something since the beginnings of the rise of the Emperor…an ornate elegance it would never truly restore. This is represented in the attire of the Emperors advisors and friend’s, there is no longer a need or a want for unnecessary pleasures. Only for what is now.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United026.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United027.jpg)
As the Senatorial procession advances forward, a human male wearing povish clothes jumps forward with a blaster and fires into the heart of the young standard bearer. Shouting “Long Remember the Death of the Republic!”, the man is mowed down by blaster fire from the soldiers in the colum. The officer of the troops is also killed in that fated instant.
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United029.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United031.jpg)
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United037.jpg)
The crowds panic and begin to flee before the voice of the Emperor is heard over the screams of small children. “STOP! This is a time for celebration! We shall celebrate the sacrifice of this brave young son of the sons! And we shall celebrate the self elimination of this insidious threat!”
(http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v115/Vator/United038.jpg)
And so the people did return to their stations, faithful that their beloved leader was right. After all, he did survive the Jedi Rebellion.
And like the Jedi Rebellion, this was but a ploy…a ploy in a much, much larger scheme.
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Indeed. Your writing is supurb. I cant wait to see more enviroments. :)
Kevin
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That was great, it came out better than I had imagined from the original script. Nice work. Excellent job with dialoge as well.
:)
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Thanks guys, glad its been universally praised so far. So how much of an improvement is this over Nal Salio?
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A fantastic start...I can already see you're dialogue blowing myself, Chewie, and Lance, out of the water. Clever with the VHS tapes too. :)
Anyone could see the improvement over Nal Solio.
I would give this beginning chapter an A+, but since you interrupted my best scoring game of DOD in months, I've got to bump it down a bit and teach you a lesson. ;)
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Ha, thanks a lot! I'm really excited about this entire project though...part II should be up sometime soon, since it's pretty short.
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Great job, I really love the dialogue.
:P
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Thanks, I really wanted the photonovel to be more like a novel than like a movie.
Announcing today, the kickoff of The United: The Politic of Conquest and Rebellion. More information in its offical thread.
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Put the novel on the opening page and on the 2nd page!
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;Dnice Job ;D