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Collecting => Customs => Photonovels and Movies => Topic started by: CHEWIE on March 31, 2005, 10:19 PM
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Here is part 9 in the Rykrof Enloe Series -
Aggressive Negotiations
Following the recent debacle on Spahl VII, Republic Intelligence
has discovered that former Ambassador Tame Heem is alive,
but has joined the Confederacy of Independent Systems.
Although news of the betrayal has spread throughout the
Republic, the Jedi Council has sent a secret message
to the former Ambassador, requesting to send a committee
to negotiate a new alliance with the Ithorians.
To ensure the success of the mission, the Jedi Council sends
a trio of its finest warriors to meet at the diplomat’s
luxurious estate. Little do the Jedi know that a former
member of their ranks lies in wait to confront them…
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It looks fantastic! CHEWIE!! This is officially EU in my book now, it is no longer just fan-fiction. I liked this chapter a lot. There were some great visuals and the ending is perfect! It really got me excited for the next one. ;D
There are a couple places I could use a bit more exlaination or a new scene. At the very begining Ithor's importance doesn't ever really get established. What do both sides want with them? The Jedi and Rykrof just kind of arrive all of a sudden and there is a Seperatist prensence that could have been explained a bit better. I think some kind of breifing scene on the gunship or on Coruscant at the beginning could help explain a lot of this.
Why was Sora Bulq trying to turn Obi-Wan and Anakin? He kind of came of nowhere too and you don't really know why he is there. Maybe a scene with him a Dooku convering about Ithor's importance would be good, if you are looking for suprise,you could keep his back to the camera or have him just out of picture, it amy add some suspence too if you know there is someone really bad there but don't know when he going to strike at our heroes.
Great customs too, I really like that Sora Bulq, he is very well done. When does he turn dark? Is it somewhere else in EU or does it start here?
Keep it up! I can't wait for Chap 10! ;D
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I saw what you wrote at the other site, and thanks! To answer all of your questions as best I can -
ITHOR - Ithor is a pacifist species, but if swayed one way or the other, they could help turn the tide in the war... with the loss of Ambassador Tame Heem, it was a major blow to the Republic. The committee was sent there to meet with him... the Separatists are there because they are hoping to be able to gain control of the planet's vast resources... I had Tame Heem mention that he thought they should join their cause or the Separatists would eventually take everything they have... in the intro, it does say:
Although news of the betrayal has spread throughout the
Republic, the Jedi Council has sent a secret message
to the former Ambassador, requesting to send a committee
to negotiate a new alliance with the Ithorians.
... so it does say that they are coming to meet with him. I guess I could have done better explaining that though...
SORA BULQ - He was kind of mentioned when Obi Wan said he felt a presence he has not felt in a long time... but again, I guess I could had laid out more of a backstory about him being there.
In the EU, Sora Bulq turns over to the Dark Side after the Battle of Geonosis... this story is just a couple of months after that battle. I also felt it was a good time to introduce General Grievous, as in the novel LABRYNTH OF EVIL, it is said that Grievous was present on Geonosis, and killed several Jedi in the catacombs there.
Thanks for the comments as they do help me. I am still continuing to try and figure out just what in the hell I am doing in making these. :-\
I do have a couple of questions though... I am going to continue to base these mainly around Rykrof Enloe. I am going to have brief appearances from a few other characters, such as I did in this one with some of the more recognizable Jedi...
What about the bad guys? I do want to have Grievous be in them some... but and tinkering with the thought of Assaj Ventress and Durge... if those two make an appearance, it will not be as main characters at all. Instead, I am creating a new character that will be a member of the Separatists... how does that sound?
Also, Trigg Fuuda is still lurking in the shadows...
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Yeah I'd like to see Greivous, Durge, and Asajj Ventress make some cameos. ;D Though you do have to be careful how much you use them and who they interact with. One thing that kinda bugs me about EU is a lack of original core characters. Many of the sources will introduce a couple new guys, but they somehow meet up with every other main character. It makes the galaxy seem too small. With trillions of people in it, they need more people who don't interact with Luke, Anakin, Boba Fett, or whoever else. And all the heroes and villians wouldn't necessarily know each other, they would probably know of each other if they are famous enough but, a lot of times don't deal directly with each other. I guess what I'm trying to say is Rykrof has already dealt directly with Dooku and mainly of the Republic guys, so if you plan on using Durge or Asajj, use them sparingly. Don't have them interact with Rykrof much, if at all. Maybe he sees them but doesn't have dialogue or something. I'm sure you'll work it out.
Keep it up! ;D
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That's exactly the way I had planned on handling it - having them maybe make cameos or something... nothing too overdone. Kind of like in the "Chaos" photonovel, where the Battle of Geonosis takes place. The battle is shown, but Rykrof gets there after it happened.
And I am working on another villian that Rykrof will get to have a few interactions with. It will be someone totally new. :)
Thanks for the advice. It is always appreciated.
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Good Original guys are always good! I can't wait to see him! ;D
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I'm game for a whole new villain.
Kevin <3 villains.
Kevin
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Wow, I didn't realize how dark the pics look here at my work computer! Had to adjust the settings a bit.
Ok, the villian is in the works... hee hee. Should I post a few pics of him, or just have him show up in a story?
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Send me pics, make them wait. ;D
Kevin
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Gaah! I've gotta see the new villain! Don't make us wait! :D
Chewie: I'd like to see Ventress and Durge. Durge I'd like to see in battle, but Ventress...maybe just a cameo over a communication or something. Kind of like in the novel where Anakin was teamed with Neeja Halcyon. (The name escapes me right now.)
I would like to see you get your hands on a few of Ricky UK's Republic Commandos, and have Rykrof give them an objective that supports a mission he and his Clone platoon are involved in. I don't want them to be an established unit, though...but one you make up and design the armor markings for.
And let's see Quinlan Vos, even if it's just a cameo at the Jedi Temple.
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Yeah. I'm very game to see what you could do with a Quin custom. If you need any refrence pictures, shoot me an email and I'll hook you up.
Kevin
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Quinlin Vos is actually in the works. Funny that you mention that.
As for the Republic Commando, I did get one from Ricky. But I tell ya, it wasn't cheap and to get more would cost me too much.
The one I have is nice, but you can't position him any. It's pretty much a non-articulated figure unfortunately. Still, it's a nice display piece. Maybe it will show up in a story, but just a cameo.
As for Assaj Ventress, yeah I was thinking of just having her in a holo recording or something... Durge will see a bit of action.
But the new villian will be the one with the most action. I haven't completely decided how to go about it yet or his role in the series, but I will try to make it cool. I have an idea... I just need to make sure I go about it the right way.
I am thinking I need a week off before starting another photonovel. They take time and are a bit stressful. But "Depths of Cholganna" just needs a bit of tweaking... look for it in your email Famine by the end of the week. Sunday at the absolute latest.
Thanks for the comments guys... heh heh I do think I might make you wait to see the villian in a photonovel instead of any sneak peek pics... but either way, I will get a few more pics taken of some other stuff I've been working on. :)
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You'd better send me somthing to post. The masses are in revolt!
Kevin
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Well we don't want that, so I just sent both you and Dimetrodon 3 new custom pics. :)
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That was very awesome. Good job CHEWIE! I wish I had my clones and my gunship, I'm so jealous. ;)
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Thanks Newman. I always like feedback (even if it's a criticism).
I don't know how many of them you have seen or not. Aggressive Negotiations is #9 in the series. They go in the following order:
#1 - Crisis on Abridon
#2 - Underground Resistance
#3 - Anti Jedi
#4 - Slaughter on Munist
#5 - Deception
#6 - Assassins of Evil
#7 - Chaos
#8 - Traitor Within
#9 - Aggressive Negotiations
If you want, you can view the first 5 of them here:
http://www.thecustomalliance.com/cook/default.asp
And stay tuned folks, #10 - Depths of Cholganna is just around the corner. :)
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I can't wait for Depths of Cholganna. Nexus galore!
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Yep- there will be a Nexu or two showing up in it. Good call. :)
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CHEWIE, if you send me Depths tonight, I can have it up after I get home from work, I think.
I forgot all about the nexu. Good call DD.
Kevin
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Let's see what I can do... I have a couple of additional shots to add.
If not today, then definitely by the weekend. I have to attend a wedding tonight and have plans all day Saturday...
But I would rather spend the weekend goofing off and customizing. :)
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Weddings=boring.
Fake ill. ;)
Kevin
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Yep - very boring. But open bar at the reception. :)
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Awesome stuff! You have convinced me to begin work on a Photonovel once I can pick up more SA troops and army builders.
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Thanks Diddly - I appreciate that.
I'd really like to get a review going for each photonovel. That would help me a lot.
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Well this would be taking place around 4 months into the war, if Grievous hasn't been seen by anyone yet, or anyone to tell the tale anyway. Question on Sora Bulq though. Nobody knew he was a dark jedi till he and Asajj Ventress tried to team up and kill Mace Windu in the Mace Windu one shot. Did that take place before or after this photonovel?
Over that stuff, I really enjoyed this one, and a lot more than the last. I always liked the droid army, but those AAT tanks that pop into battle. they did it for me. lol. I love it.
And Grievous introduction is a great idea.
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Yeh - just a few months into the war. I don't really know too much about the EU - so I am trying to be careful with this.
Yes - for Sora Bulq, this would have taken place recently after Sora Bulq turned on Mace.
Thanks for the comments, and if you have some EU ideas I should incorporate, please let me know. :)
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Ok, this one's back up too.
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Number 9 back online.
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Great way of introducing General Grievous! You have already made Gen. Grievous much more badass than he was in ROTS. ;)
I really liked the blast effects on the shot clone troopers, very effective.
My favorite shot is the one of the Ithorian looking at the arrival of the Jedi - I loved the way that you composed that shot. Having things in the foreground as well as the background is a nice touch and looks great. ;D
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Thanks Greg, and I think it's cool that you've been able to go back and look at these earlier ones, and are able to put up with the lame photography. ;)
I do like that one pic though of the Ithorian looking out the window.
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;DI liked this one alot!Great job