deanna - thanks alot for your comments. i hope you enjoyed the story and the effects. as i said it was my first shot at effects so thanks for your encouragement!
robo quack glad you liked the pics and customs. i had hoped people would enjoy the story too, so much of what you see in PN's is clones, clones, clones, i really wanted to try and breakaways from that era.
no offense taken on the grammar suggestion. if it is in the deveronians lines, i was trying to emphasize the lisp and poor ability to speak basic in that spicies. otherwise it's just me messing up! i'll dfinetley run a spell check next chapter.
thanks for your comments and suggestions!