The United: The Sacrifice the Bearer Beared

[Vator]

Thanks guys, glad its been universally praised so far. So how much of an improvement is this over Nal Salio?

[Jediknight760071]

A fantastic start...I can already see you're dialogue blowing myself, Chewie, and Lance, out of the water. Clever with the VHS tapes too.

Anyone could see the improvement over Nal Solio.

I would give this beginning chapter an A+, but since you interrupted my best scoring game of DOD in months, I've got to bump it down a bit and teach you a lesson.

[Vator]

Ha, thanks a lot! I'm really excited about this entire project though...part II should be up sometime soon, since it's pretty short.

[CHEWIE]

Great job, I really love the dialogue.

 

[Vator]

Thanks, I really wanted the photonovel to be more like a novel than like a movie.
Announcing today, the kickoff of The United: The Politic of Conquest and Rebellion. More information in its offical thread.

[Vator]

Put the novel on the opening page and on the 2nd page!

[Deanna Rash]

 ;Dnice Job