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Photonovels and Movies / Re: Duel of the Sith: Chapter 3 - The Investigation
« on: May 22, 2006, 06:20 PM »
Another awesome chapter!
Here's my miniscule gripe: The sentence about Lord Gorn hoping to "replace Lord Maul" is just slightly misleading, I initially thought this scene was taking place prior to Maul's death in TPM, as if Maul was still alive and Gorn was hoping to nudge him out of the way.
Minor gripe 2: I wish you had painted Gorn just a bit, to make him look different than the standard Imperial guard. The face is cool and the Imperial Guard armor is awesome for customizing, but a little painting to differentiate him from the guards would have been nice.
Now, that said, this is another great, great chapter. I really love where this story is going and I hope to see a big smackdown between Punio and Gorn.
I really just love, love, love the re-animated Plageuis storyline, it's very clever and not something I've seen before in photonovels or in SW EU (not that I actually read any of it). But it's very clever and imaginative nevertheless.
And, of course, your dioramas are just mind-blowing, especially that kick-ass council scene!
The fight scene was also damn cool! Well-done.
I was very glad to see a scene of the Council actually discussing the Sith threat and I think we should have seen a similar scene in AOTC, since that movie almost makes it seem like the Council has all but forgotten about the Sith, but in ROTS there are numerous references to the "Sith we've been looking for," even though they don't seem very interested or concerned in AOTC at all.
Very nice customs and I really like your original characters, you do a very economical job of establishing them in short scenes. Punio was great, but I like Ty-Ri and Gorn a great deal and they feel very fleshed-out already.
I also like the custom ship! Is that a GI Joe plane? I think I saw that recently in a store and thought that it would make a great custom SW fighter. Nice job! Nice painting and use of a droid head.
I am not sure about Aleena, though. I wish you had made her a little more sympathetic, not just a whiny spoiled girl. She comes across like Stacy, Wayne's clingy ex-girlfriend from "Wayne's World", but she's not very interesting or sympathetic. I think exploring the dynamic of a young Jedi torn between duty and love is rife with dramatic potential, so try to make Aleena a little more compelling, not just a needy clinger.
Anyway, that said, this is still first-rate, kick ass material! Keep up the amazing work!
Here's my miniscule gripe: The sentence about Lord Gorn hoping to "replace Lord Maul" is just slightly misleading, I initially thought this scene was taking place prior to Maul's death in TPM, as if Maul was still alive and Gorn was hoping to nudge him out of the way.
Minor gripe 2: I wish you had painted Gorn just a bit, to make him look different than the standard Imperial guard. The face is cool and the Imperial Guard armor is awesome for customizing, but a little painting to differentiate him from the guards would have been nice.
Now, that said, this is another great, great chapter. I really love where this story is going and I hope to see a big smackdown between Punio and Gorn.
I really just love, love, love the re-animated Plageuis storyline, it's very clever and not something I've seen before in photonovels or in SW EU (not that I actually read any of it). But it's very clever and imaginative nevertheless.
And, of course, your dioramas are just mind-blowing, especially that kick-ass council scene!
The fight scene was also damn cool! Well-done.
I was very glad to see a scene of the Council actually discussing the Sith threat and I think we should have seen a similar scene in AOTC, since that movie almost makes it seem like the Council has all but forgotten about the Sith, but in ROTS there are numerous references to the "Sith we've been looking for," even though they don't seem very interested or concerned in AOTC at all.
Very nice customs and I really like your original characters, you do a very economical job of establishing them in short scenes. Punio was great, but I like Ty-Ri and Gorn a great deal and they feel very fleshed-out already.
I also like the custom ship! Is that a GI Joe plane? I think I saw that recently in a store and thought that it would make a great custom SW fighter. Nice job! Nice painting and use of a droid head.
I am not sure about Aleena, though. I wish you had made her a little more sympathetic, not just a whiny spoiled girl. She comes across like Stacy, Wayne's clingy ex-girlfriend from "Wayne's World", but she's not very interesting or sympathetic. I think exploring the dynamic of a young Jedi torn between duty and love is rife with dramatic potential, so try to make Aleena a little more compelling, not just a needy clinger.
Anyway, that said, this is still first-rate, kick ass material! Keep up the amazing work!